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Categories Cartoons & Comics > Traditional Media > Comics > Pages

©2009 ~persimmon
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I cut the snot out of my thumb (OW) and yet I think I like how I drew this page better than the last page. Maybe I should cut my thumb more often?

Also giant sign gag is sort of corny. May have to cut in the redos and think of something else suitably deadpan and droll for our friend here to say.

IF HE IS A FRIEND. DUNT DUN DUNNNNNNNN.

how's everything else working? questions? comments? rotten tomatoes and a chorus of boos? I FEAR NOTHINGdonthurtme

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~firepixie May 15, 2009, 10:20:28 PM
Wow, not even cookies? What hard asses. :XD: Even angels and devils like desserts. Why else would there be cakes named after them? :confused:

Hmm, unless I'm mistaken, but the male's hands seem rather small for a dude... Of course if this is how he was supposed to be drawn then never mind; I know not all fellas have large hands. ^^;

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I gaze out the window at the freshly fallen snow while taking a sip of coffee. A small smile forms slowly on my lips and then I sigh.

"...This coffee is cold and stale again."
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~jdcunard May 15, 2009, 11:13:29 PM
lol! Love your dialogue. "Wait justa gosh-darn minute!" Where did your learn the English language again?

I also real like this page, never figure this guy be Egyptian ... but love the "writing on the wall" :love:

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GunSlinger by Day, Ninja by Night, Sweet Lover in between
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~jdcunard May 15, 2009, 11:14:55 PM
Ok a quick suggestion...

You should consider doing a link to your previous pages

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GunSlinger by Day, Ninja by Night, Sweet Lover in between
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~Cedarwolf22 May 16, 2009, 4:23:47 AM
Hahahaha, so they don't accept girl scout cookies?? 8(
What scrooges! I'LL TAKE THEM.

I missed a few pages nooooooooooooo D8 I like the wing thing she has going on! Are they "crumbling" out of existence in the second-to-last panel? Personally I'd make that pop out of the panel and break the border to make it more obvious, it's a cool little effect and deserves some more space XD

This is still oh so mysteriousssssss. MOAR PLOX.
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~ioyousbook May 16, 2009, 6:18:39 AM
Aw, man, I like the sign. It made me grin.

It did take a few looks to figure out what he was doing in the second panel--but I think that's just the low level of contrast on the sketch at that point, in color I suspect the cigs would stand out more clearly.

I really like the interaction overall. And I remain AGOG TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS

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The Original Psychic Moonbuggy!
LESLIE
A Two-Bit Jeremiah in Chuck Taylors

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~persimmon May 16, 2009, 8:15:31 AM
Wellllllll....There's kind of a reason. That will make more sense. Hopefully. In the next pages or so XD If I'm lucky.

Also heh yeah he does have rather teeny hands. My proportions are all over the place in these sketches so that's partly to blame. Big hands would probably work better on this guy. I'll adjust that in the do-over. Thank you for pointing it out tho!

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And it's all for me grog
Me jolly, jolly grog
It's all for me beer and tobacco
Oh I spent all me tin on the ladies drinkin' gin
Be sailin' in the mornin' when the wind blows

:pirate: :skull: :ahoy: :skullbones:
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~persimmon May 16, 2009, 8:19:58 AM
Deep south? 8|

hahah but oh....he *isn't*....Well in a sense, anyways...hem-hem.

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And it's all for me grog
Me jolly, jolly grog
It's all for me beer and tobacco
Oh I spent all me tin on the ladies drinkin' gin
Be sailin' in the mornin' when the wind blows

:pirate: :skull: :ahoy: :skullbones:
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~persimmon May 16, 2009, 8:21:41 AM
I do need to do that. Haven't quite figured out how to adjust it where it says Page Whatever instead of (link) :\

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And it's all for me grog
Me jolly, jolly grog
It's all for me beer and tobacco
Oh I spent all me tin on the ladies drinkin' gin
Be sailin' in the mornin' when the wind blows

:pirate: :skull: :ahoy: :skullbones:
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~persimmon May 16, 2009, 8:30:54 AM
I think you of all people could totally get a package of Caramel DeLites past security :D

Yes but no worries! there's not that many pages. Yes she did have wings. I threw it in totally random as a visual language experiment and I actually find it quite funny how people interpret it differently :) maybe I will have to keep it after all. Thanks for the advice thar too. I'll try that in the rerun :)

I'll try to start clearing up the mysteriousness here in the next few pages. MOAR PLOX XOMING XOON

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And it's all for me grog
Me jolly, jolly grog
It's all for me beer and tobacco
Oh I spent all me tin on the ladies drinkin' gin
Be sailin' in the mornin' when the wind blows

:pirate: :skull: :ahoy: :skullbones:
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